Thursday, August 11, 2011

how i got the food choice

well when i was young my mom had a lau lau shop and they where one of the best lau lau shops the where very popular. i choose this because i usde to watch and make trouble and make every pot and pan fall and my mom use to get really mad i i choose lau lau as my food of choice
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  1. MauriceAugust 12, 2011 at 10:47 AM

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  2. MauriceAugust 12, 2011 at 2:44 PM

    Hey Ryan. Ooh, I can tell that your project is gonna be really interesting especially since you included details about how your mom would get mad when you would make trouble to every pot and pan and how you would watch them fall. I'll be looking forward to seeing your essay. Good luck!

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  3. JoyAugust 12, 2011 at 3:00 PM

    WAZUP SOUZA. Okay so one thing I liked about your post is how you included everything that was required, also how you put in a specific memory. Some things I think you can improve on is your grammar, such as the beginning of sentences have to be capital. Also you repeat lau lau a lot, so you might want to change that. Overall, good job.

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  4. lsueokaAugust 16, 2011 at 4:38 PM

    Hi Ryan,
    I agree with your teammates that your ideas include some specific actions and events that would add to the essay. Be sure to include specific sensory detail about the food itself, as well as the family connections (besides getting into trouble with your mom ;)
    mrs s

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